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Reasonable attempt but  it lacks real clarity on the 4 requires elements: problem setting, presenting problem, topic area and use of strategic business IT
Q1b Student revised answer after careful consideration of the feedback My word count is 113
An investment bank is leading other Group entities into becoming "South East Asia's most valued universal bank". Its staff for grew from 1000 to 24,000 while is previous customer base grew from a few thousands into few hundred thousands.

New IT projects often includes more hardware into a finite data center, exerbating space, thermal, power, operations, maintenance and human resources issues.

Inability to achieve IT's mission of 4Es - Efficent, Effective, Enabling and Economical would hamper IT's strategic roles in the Group's pursuit of its vision by year 2010.

It is imperative that IT new initiatives must go on to provide information and collaboration needs of its growing staff force and customer base.
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This is rather weak as it seem to lack the 4 eassesential features and one wonder if you took any notuce at all of the feedback:

Problem - not all that clear but seems to be about space or mission and you seem to be mistaking being asked to do something as equivalent to a problem defintion. Topic - I cannot say from this what litearture you will research so that you gain the necessary academic knowledge. Startegic = this may be here but its not clear to me what is implied as to your outcome or what kind of solution you have in mind. Setting - an investment bank is not good enough and we need somthing more postiove than that
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Q2a - Briefly discuss problem causes and hence suggest a possible outcome that when used by appropriate situation actors my solve or partially resolve the problem (Max 200 words)
References Workbook section 4.4, 4.5 and 4.10 plus topical hints
Student Answer My word count is 61
It is suspected that the existing data centre does not meet mission expectations because of increasing usage and no consequent changes in technology given the space involved has not been increased.  It is therefore suggested that new MS server virtualization technology is considered and it is therefore planned to produce a set of recommendations on this plus associated support best practices.
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This is a good start at an answer but with only one cause listed one wonders if the problem has not been properly explored and you are possibly fixated on the virtualization idea.
Q2b Student revised answer after careful consideration of the feedback My word count is 96
It is suspected that the existing data centre does not meet mission expectations. It is not entirely clear why this might be so but it may be related to: a mix of technology, poor network infrastructures, uncontrolled use of user applications or simply lack of space for adequate expansion of services.

However, after a preliminary investigation and a review of mission needs a relatively simple way forward is to consider new MS server virtualization technology and it is therefore planned to produce a set of recommendations on this plus associated technician and usage support best practices.
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