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However,they do not know where the terminal is on the long long road.Some walk as tourists without any haste.They stop occasionally to appreciate the blooming and withering of flowers,the rolling and extension of clouds.Although there are times of heavy storms their hearts are always like an open net which lets go distresses.

译文3：Different people go along differently.Some take hasty steps in anxiety.Obsessed with reaching the next goal in time,they spare no time for sightseeing along the way,nor do they have a clear view of where their long roads end.Others travel leisurely like tourists They would take time off now and then for a look a blooming flowers or fallen petals.They would stop to admire clouds gathering and dispersing.Even when they go against the wind or are caught in the rain,they never get annoyed,for worries slip off their minds as from an open net.

从“行路难，但人生之路谁都要走。”这句到“有的人在赶路，心急切切……”这句，汉语是能够接受的，虽然句意的转折显得有点儿突兀。语言学家王力教授曾经说过：中国语法是软的，富有弹性。中国语法以达意为主。

然而，译文1和译文2所作的直译，在两句之间没有任何的“添枝加叶”，在native speakers看来，就构成了“语篇层面”上的跳脱。这是因为“西洋语法是硬的，没有弹性”（王力语）。

译3在两句之间添了Different people go along differently，决非“蛇足”，行文的coherence和cohesion自然而然得以增强，“丰腴美”出现在字里行间。

再说“有的人如游客，不急不慌，走走停停，看花开花落，看云卷云舒”这句：

译文1：They take a break from time to time,appreciating the blossoms and the floating clouds.（15 words）

译文2：They stop occasionally to appreciate the blooming and withering of flowers,the rolling and extension of clouds.(17 words)

译文3：They would take time off now and then for a look at blooming flowers or fallen petals.They would stop to admire clouds gathering and dispersing.(26 words)

以上3句译文的字数有明显变化：

15 17 26。

数字是枯燥的，但是，数字的变化再次向我们暗示了汉英表达之微妙区别，特别是译文3。从“有的人如游客，不急不慌，走走停停，看花开花落，看云卷云舒”可以看出，句子表达十分疏放，极为随意，一个主语（有的人），竟带出了一串谓语。

译文1和译文2，就照这个句型直译。使用一个主语，结果就失却了一份行文的淡定从容，文意也未能得以充分的演绎。——看来，英语不相信“骨感美”。

译文3将原句作“一切为二”的处置，They would…的重复，不仅构成了parallelism（平行结构）的对称美，这种形式更好地为其内容（从容洒脱的人生态度）服务。

单从表层看，译文3的take time off now and then for a look at确有“累赘拖沓”之嫌，其实，细加品味，却让读者感受到一种“丰腴美”。尤其是and then二词，更有一种音韵。从美学角度分析，blooming flowers or fallen petals比blooming and withering of flowers更可反复诵读，因为，withering of flowers远没有fallen petals所蕴涵的美感。

当然，译文3的情态动词“would”https://www.51lunwen.org/englishpaper.html也用得很地道，既表示一种习惯动作，又用其过去式表示一种委婉语气。相比之下，译文1和译文2皆用了一般现在时，略显不足。此乃多余的话。